22 October, 2010 at 7:50 am #5970
limericks, haikus are the highest of all the artforms. So go for it wordsmiths!
22 October, 2010 at 7:50 am #7353
Insulin at home
money left for sweeties
Which way will I go?
22 October, 2010 at 7:51 am #7354
Hated daily needle
my skin like mosquito
Cursed with this disease
22 October, 2010 at 8:53 am #7356AnonymousInactive
this is all to much. This is like year 6 homework!
22 October, 2010 at 9:14 am #7358
Lancet pricks the finger
Will I lick or use a tissue?
22 October, 2010 at 9:15 am #7359
22 October, 2010 at 12:59 pm #7360AnonymousInactive
Tim, you appear to have trampled over centuries of Japanese poetic beauty. A haiku should be 5 syllables, then 7, then 5. For example:
No longer makes insulin.
I inject pig juice.
22 October, 2010 at 1:03 pm #7361
To be pedantic @woolfy,
haikus have 17 moras, which are different from syllables.
BTW, other readers, @woolfy did actually write the first two haikus on this page and, indeed, takes worthy credit for actually coming up with the name of the site in the first place. I believe a barely audible and somewhat contemptuous round of applause is in order.
22 October, 2010 at 1:41 pm #7362AnonymousInactive
Well, I stand corrected. But your last haiku has 18 morae. And apparently it should address the natural world, contain a seasonal word, and a “cutting word”. So:
Amputated toes can’t freeze.
My silver-lined cloud.
I’ve been very literal with my definition of cutting word there…
Thank you for the creative credit as well. (I also came up with the tagline) I should confess to not actually being a diabetic… I do get my blood tested regularly though – almost every time I visit Tim!
22 October, 2010 at 2:40 pm #7364
I should have mentioned that Dave also came up with the wonderfully tasteless tagline. Sorry Dave – I’ve been living off your uncredited creative work on the blog for the last two years. What a bastard I am!
22 October, 2010 at 4:10 pm #7368
I belive the cutting word traditionally comes at the end of one of the lines… /pedant
heat hypo …
Gives reason to eat ice cream
Or maybe sweeties
[where I have utilised the western version of the cutting word, and inserted an ellipsis as a break, as the original japanese verse writers intended the kireji to be. Not that I’m not busy or anything atm…]
23 October, 2010 at 11:53 am #7370
Dx means despair
sought on web
Hope renewed – Shoot-Up!
23 October, 2010 at 1:03 pm #7371Hairy GnomeParticipant
want me to write something as anal as haikus? I’ve barely mastered the subtle art of limericks, so you have to be joking!
23 October, 2010 at 10:26 pm #7379
23 October, 2010 at 10:28 pm #7380
that lofty BG –
up too much insulin…
Sweat pouring down from
(proof that insulin-dependent diabetes is PMS/Perpetual Motion Syndrome)
23 October, 2010 at 10:30 pm #7381
Lantus is bottom*;
fairy-like “fast stuff” flits
up towards above.
*Or Bottom, ’cause Lant-ass does the donkey-work
23 October, 2010 at 10:39 pm #7383
Clixed finger is squeezed:
a blink, sleeves are speckled
with red polka dots.
23 October, 2010 at 10:41 pm #7384
No chance of respite
digital pepper pots:
my logbook craves spice.
24 October, 2010 at 11:43 am #7388
25 October, 2010 at 7:34 pm #7410
25 October, 2010 at 7:38 pm #7412
Eating & drinking
& gallons galore…
Devouring D is born.
25 October, 2010 at 7:40 pm #7413
Yawn until tears drop:
down in the dumps drizzle
needs big macaroons.
26 October, 2010 at 7:09 am #7415
pee-hive* weeps honey.
26 October, 2010 at 7:13 am #7416
26 October, 2010 at 12:54 pm #7422
My wounded war zones
bum and fingertips)
hanker for cease-fire…
26 October, 2010 at 12:58 pm #7425
he! These are as good as the limericks!
26 October, 2010 at 1:31 pm #7426
26 October, 2010 at 1:45 pm #7427
Cecile – I hang my s(h)exist head in shame
27 October, 2010 at 6:57 am #7432
Betas banished from
27 October, 2010 at 7:03 am #7433
tattling, bloody telltale
blabs out all sweet sins!
27 October, 2010 at 2:08 pm #7436
27 October, 2010 at 10:09 pm #7456AnonymousInactive
New poetic verse
distracts me from pain
Bruised injection site
28 October, 2010 at 7:40 pm #7460
pulls at my strings.
Jig a jerky dance.
31 October, 2010 at 1:02 pm #7466
booms and soprano squeaks…
Seeking middle C.
4 November, 2010 at 7:24 am #7487
Blood sugar bonsai ✄
shoots that spring forth all day,
pining for the sky.
8 November, 2010 at 8:54 am #7513
A yellow sunrise:
up with ear full of gall*.
Down…and up too fast.
*euphemism for “bilious, daffodilly vomit”
13 November, 2010 at 8:57 pm #7540
Blunt thorn in my side,
needle used many times
to pin up pot luck.
4 December, 2010 at 11:54 am #7658AnonymousInactive
Absence of mortar…
would keep me five bricks high?
10 January, 2011 at 11:16 pm #7860
Actually the plural of haiku is haiku. And in Japanese, words have more syllables. The word Geisha for instance in English has two syllables, in Japanese, three. A Japanese haiku is thus much simpler, very spare, with very few words. An English haiku with about 12 syllables is more in the spirit of a Japanese haiku.
I haven’t written any haiku about diabetes! I find it hard to write about my own problems. But I’ve enjoyed reading.
11 January, 2011 at 9:08 am #7864
11 January, 2011 at 10:07 am #7865
Pedantic, picky, moi? You are so right.
18 January, 2011 at 11:54 am #7939
shortest long shorts
hide my needle
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