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  • #5970

    Tim
    Keymaster

    After limericks, haikus are the highest of all the artforms. So go for it wordsmiths!

  • #7353

    Tim
    Keymaster

    Insulin at home
    No money left for sweeties
    Which way will I go?

  • #7354

    Tim
    Keymaster

    Hated daily needle
    Bites my skin like mosquito
    Cursed with this disease

  • #7356

    Anonymous

    Tim this is all to much. This is like year 6 homework!

  • #7358

    Tim
    Keymaster

    Lancet pricks the finger
    Crimson blood spots
    Will I lick or use a tissue?

  • #7359

    Tim
    Keymaster

    @mustard – it’s important for diabetics to join together and write haikus & limericks. Through the medium of poetry we can finally beat diabetes! Woo!

  • #7360

    Anonymous

    Tim, you appear to have trampled over centuries of Japanese poetic beauty. A haiku should be 5 syllables, then 7, then 5. For example:

    Rancid pancreas
    No longer makes insulin.
    I inject pig juice.

  • #7361

    Tim
    Keymaster

    To be pedantic @woolfy, haikus have 17 moras, which are different from syllables.

    BTW, other readers, @woolfy did actually write the first two haikus on this page and, indeed, takes worthy credit for actually coming up with the name of the site in the first place. I believe a barely audible and somewhat contemptuous round of applause is in order.

  • #7362

    Anonymous

    Well, I stand corrected. But your last haiku has 18 morae. And apparently it should address the natural world, contain a seasonal word, and a “cutting word”. So:

    Winter comes again;
    Amputated toes can’t freeze.
    My silver-lined cloud.

    I’ve been very literal with my definition of cutting word there…

    Thank you for the creative credit as well. (I also came up with the tagline) I should confess to not actually being a diabetic… I do get my blood tested regularly though – almost every time I visit Tim!

  • #7364

    Tim
    Keymaster

    Yes, I should have mentioned that Dave also came up with the wonderfully tasteless tagline. Sorry Dave – I’ve been living off your uncredited creative work on the blog for the last two years. What a bastard I am!

  • #7368

    Annette A
    Participant

    I belive the cutting word traditionally comes at the end of one of the lines… /pedant
    Summer heat hypo …
    Gives reason to eat ice cream
    Or maybe sweeties

    [where I have utilised the western version of the cutting word, and inserted an ellipsis as a break, as the original japanese verse writers intended the kireji to be. Not that I’m not busy or anything atm…]

  • #7370

    Annette A
    Participant

    Dx means despair
    Enlightenment sought on web
    Hope renewed – Shoot-Up!

  • #7371

    Hairy Gnome
    Participant

    You want me to write something as anal as haikus? I’ve barely mastered the subtle art of limericks, so you have to be joking!

  • #7379

    Cecile
    Participant

    @teloz: Get yourself a pair of stilts, then you’ll be high enough to haiku ;)

  • #7380

    Cecile
    Participant

    that lofty BG –
    shoot up too much insulin…
    Sweat pouring down from

    (proof that insulin-dependent diabetes is PMS/Perpetual Motion Syndrome)

  • #7381

    Cecile
    Participant

    Lantus is bottom*;
    while fairy-like “fast stuff” flits
    up towards above.

    *Or Bottom, ’cause Lant-ass does the donkey-work :D

  • #7383

    Cecile
    Participant

    Clixed finger is squeezed:
    in a blink, sleeves are speckled
    with red polka dots.

  • #7384

    Cecile
    Participant

    No chance of respite
    for digital pepper pots:
    my logbook craves spice.

  • #7388

    Annette A
    Participant

    @ckoei:
    >Clixed finger is squeezed:
    >in a blink, sleeves are speckled
    >with red polka dots.

    Oh yes, I just had a vision of pricking, squeezing, ‘huh? No blood?’ Squeezing harder, fountain of blood droplets. WTF? :-D

  • #7410

    Cecile
    Participant

    @annette: This inspirational little geyser erupted last Friday at a restaurant – covering both sleeves & a slice of (goremet?) bread : the closest I’ll come to being a goremand, like you finger lickers :P

  • #7412

    Cecile
    Participant

    Eating & drinking
    heapsful & gallons galore…
    Devouring D is born.

  • #7413

    Cecile
    Participant

    Yawn until tears drop:
    such down in the dumps drizzle
    needs big macaroons.

  • #7415

    Cecile
    Participant

    Foulbroody T-cells
    scupper pancreatic Bs;
    pee-hive* weeps honey.

    *bladder

  • #7416

    Cecile
    Participant

    Blest be scaled eyes’ crust-
    acean discrimination:
    counting only crabs.

  • #7422

    Cecile
    Participant

    My wounded war zones
    (belly, bum and fingertips)
    hanker for cease-fire…

  • #7425

    Tim
    Keymaster

    He he! These are as good as the limericks!

  • #7426

    Cecile
    Participant

    @tim: I’m extremely affronted by your sexist laughter – seeing that 11 of the crop of 16 were composed by females…your chuckles should be reformed to she she he ;)

  • #7427

    Tim
    Keymaster

    Sorry Cecile – I hang my s(h)exist head in shame :-(

  • #7432

    Cecile
    Participant

    Betas banished from
    Langerhansian islets.
    Water(into)loo*.

    *and maw

  • #7433

    Cecile
    Participant

    Damn haemoglobin…
    That tattling, bloody telltale
    blabs out all sweet sins!

  • #7436

    Cecile
    Participant

    Three point one four one
    five nine two six five three five
    eight nine seven nine…

    (proof that a haiku’s BG remains low after eating a piece…)

  • #7456

    Anonymous

    New poetic verse
    Nearly distracts me from pain
    Bruised injection site

  • #7460

    Cecile
    Participant

    Hypoglycaemic
    puppeteer pulls at my strings.
    Jig a jerky dance.

  • #7466

    Cecile
    Participant

    Diabetes sings:
    bass booms and soprano squeaks…
    Seeking middle C.

  • #7487

    Cecile
    Participant

    Blood sugar bonsai ✄
    prune shoots that spring forth all day,
    pining for the sky.

  • #7513

    Cecile
    Participant

    A yellow sunrise:
    wake up with ear full of gall*.
    Down…and up too fast.

    *euphemism for “bilious, daffodilly vomit”

  • #7540

    Cecile
    Participant

    Blunt thorn in my side,
    this needle used many times
    to pin up pot luck.

  • #7658

    Anonymous

    Absence of mortar…
    What would keep me five bricks high?
    CGM ivy!

  • #7860

    lizz
    Participant

    Actually the plural of haiku is haiku. And in Japanese, words have more syllables. The word Geisha for instance in English has two syllables, in Japanese, three. A Japanese haiku is thus much simpler, very spare, with very few words. An English haiku with about 12 syllables is more in the spirit of a Japanese haiku.

    I haven’t written any haiku about diabetes! I find it hard to write about my own problems. But I’ve enjoyed reading.

  • #7864

    Tim
    Keymaster

    @lizz – ah, a pedantic, picky point – you’ll fit right in here! ;-)

  • #7865

    lizz
    Participant

    Lol. Pedantic, picky, moi? You are so right.

  • #7939

    lizz
    Participant

    30 degrees
    my shortest long shorts
    hide my needle

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