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Tim this is all to much. This is like year 6 homework!
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@mustard – it’s important for diabetics to join together and write haikus & limericks. Through the medium of poetry we can finally beat diabetes! Woo!
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Tim, you appear to have trampled over centuries of Japanese poetic beauty. A haiku should be 5 syllables, then 7, then 5. For example:
Rancid pancreas
No longer makes insulin.
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To be pedantic @woolfy, haikus have 17 moras, which are different from syllables.
BTW, other readers, @woolfy did actually write the first two haikus on this page and, indeed, takes worthy credit for actually coming up with the name of the site in the first place. I believe a barely audible and somewhat contemptuous round of applause is in order.
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Well, I stand corrected. But your last haiku has 18 morae. And apparently it should address the natural world, contain a seasonal word, and a “cutting word”. So:
Winter comes again;
Amputated toes can’t freeze.
My silver-lined cloud.I’ve been very literal with my definition of cutting word there…
Thank you for the creative credit as well. (I also came up with the tagline) I should confess to not actually being a diabetic… I do get my blood tested regularly though – almost every time I visit Tim!
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I belive the cutting word traditionally comes at the end of one of the lines… /pedant
Summer heat hypo …
Gives reason to eat ice cream
Or maybe sweeties[where I have utilised the western version of the cutting word, and inserted an ellipsis as a break, as the original japanese verse writers intended the kireji to be. Not that I’m not busy or anything atm…]
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@teloz: Get yourself a pair of stilts, then you’ll be high enough to haiku
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@ckoei:
>Clixed finger is squeezed:
>in a blink, sleeves are speckled
>with red polka dots.Oh yes, I just had a vision of pricking, squeezing, ‘huh? No blood?’ Squeezing harder, fountain of blood droplets. WTF?
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@annette: This inspirational little geyser erupted last Friday at a restaurant – covering both sleeves & a slice of (goremet?) bread : the closest I’ll come to being a goremand, like you finger lickers
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Blest be scaled eyes’ crust-
acean discrimination:
counting only crabs. -
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@tim: I’m extremely affronted by your sexist laughter – seeing that 11 of the crop of 16 were composed by females…your chuckles should be reformed to she she he
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Three point one four one
five nine two six five three five
eight nine seven nine…(proof that a haiku’s BG remains low after eating a piece…)
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New poetic verse
Nearly distracts me from pain
Bruised injection site -
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Absence of mortar…
What would keep me five bricks high?
CGM ivy! -
Actually the plural of haiku is haiku. And in Japanese, words have more syllables. The word Geisha for instance in English has two syllables, in Japanese, three. A Japanese haiku is thus much simpler, very spare, with very few words. An English haiku with about 12 syllables is more in the spirit of a Japanese haiku.
I haven’t written any haiku about diabetes! I find it hard to write about my own problems. But I’ve enjoyed reading.
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@lizz – ah, a pedantic, picky point – you’ll fit right in here!
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