10 December, 2011 at 12:07 pm #6105AnonymousInactive
These needles pin me to the ground
Blood tests always tie me down
I inflict these wounds upon myself
In the name of keeping my “good health”
Carb-count this and
Prick this finger
Watch that fat
How much more *can* I take?
But why should I whine away?
My life continues anyway.
Remember that other’s lives are much worse
And diabetes is a very forgiving curse
10 December, 2011 at 5:15 pm #9239TimKeymaster
is so much better than the infamous diabetes limericks thread (http://www.shootuporputup.co.uk/user-groups/shoot-up/forum/topic/diabetes-limericks/). Hurrah!
10 December, 2011 at 5:51 pm #9242AnonymousInactive
Well, to be fair, it’s probably much easier to write without such a strict rhyme and rhythm scheme
thanks for the complement nonetheless… I don’t actually feel quite this bitter about diabetes… but it was late at night and I wanted a topic to write a poem about – and what better subject is there eh?
11 December, 2011 at 7:47 am #9245CecileParticipant
Are poems then diabetter
show us what’s our matter?
I’d much rather pick
A strict limerick:
It’s blessed with chains* that fetter.
*Thanks, @martynp, for showing that the very structure of limericks represents a diabetic regime, so they don’t need to refer to it at all…whoo! Now for 200 more! (and by keeping to rhyme & rhythm, I won’t be forgiven by means of blindness, kaput kidneys, dicky ticker, limb loss, etc.)
11 December, 2011 at 9:31 am #9246AnonymousInactive
now that, my friend, is a very arty farty way of looking at it – and that means I love it!
11 December, 2011 at 10:38 pm #9248CecileParticipant
“…better” with “matter” isn’t arty-farty, it’s South Efrican… and you shouldn’t love it, ’cause it buggers up your forum topic (which claims to contain a single poem).
12 December, 2011 at 6:17 pm #9252AnonymousInactive
^^ Ah that’s easily fixed! ^^
I was referring to the way that you compared a rhyme scheme to a diabetic life… I’m a real sucker for clever analogies like that
13 December, 2011 at 9:09 am #9253
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